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March 16, 2008
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Stacks of books piled up high
Glinting titles in the bleeding light
A hundred pencils scattered around
A girl sits at her desk feeling down
Sand's running out, no time to think
She picks a pen and begins to ink
Music flows from her headphones
As worries go, so does her frown
An hour flies, and then two
But there's still so much left to do
The sky's begun to pale and pink
The birds wake up and start to shriek
And then the alarm starts to ring
She switches it off and feels nothing
It's too late the magic's gone
Shattered by the awful sound
Ome more morning of the quiet dream
One more morning of the moon's beams
:iconfukaimorimidori:
Yay, I finally managed to write a poem!

It sucks though... So yeah this is me when I'm in serious artist mode.
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:iconazraeldarkangel540:
this is good work if it is your first poem.. i like the imagery... rhyme may be a bit shaky (with the exception of the final couplet, i love that) but again this is your first attempt.. Why don't you try free verse? If you'd like can you pls have a look at my work?

Thanks and good luck!
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:iconfukaimorimidori:
:hug: Thank you!
No it's not my first, but this is definitely my worst. (Creativity can't be forced, darnit! ^^; )
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:iconazraeldarkangel540:
hehe, of course you cannot force creativity...
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:iconfukaimorimidori:
:D Now why can't teachers understand that?
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:iconazraeldarkangel540:
that's because some of them are not creative themselves!
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:iconred-dragon-tamer:
This is really good! There is nice rhythm and flow, as well as details. This is really good! Don't be so down on yourself k? XD
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:iconbellakasumi:
Good imagery, but the rhyme kinda gets off and so does the rhythm. Interesting, tho! nice work
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