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I've always loved the dark. While people are always afraid that there may be something lurking in the darkness, just waiting to scare them, I've always been confident that I can hide from that something. And when the right time comes... I attack.

In the day, I travel. I am a nomad, and have no place to call a home. At night... When the flaming ball we call the sun disapears and the glowing silver disc that is the moon rises, my power is strenghtened, and I become something inhuman.

Some people may call me a witch, maybe a monster, or maybe even a demon. I call myself a survivor. Face it. Life is cruel, and I survive in any way I can. Even if I have to kill. And I do enjoy killing.

This is a story on the power of shadows, and how light will not always truimph, no matter what you may think.
This is the beganning of my story, The Shadow of a Dream. As I absolutely detest sappy Asian dramas in which the action is slow and it takes half the series for the couple to admit that they like each other, even though they have been meant for each other from the beganning, I wrote this story bearing that in mind.

Hence, the sequence is extremely fast, to the point in which a couple of scenes are a little underdeveloped. However, I can promise you that the romance and action comes in hard and fast. I hope you enjoy reading The Shadow of a Dream, and will read the sequel Remember Me. Thank you.


Prologue: [link]
Chapter one:[link]
Chapter two: [link]
Chapter three: [link]
Chapter four: [link]
Chapter five: [link]
Chapter six:[link]
Chapter seven: [link]
Chapter eight: [link]
Chapter nine: [link]
Chapter ten: [link]
Chapter eleven: [link]
Chapter twelve: [link]
Chapter thirteen: [link]
Chapter fourteen: [link]
Chapter fifteen: [link]
Chapter sixteen: [link]
Epilogue: [link]


I'm thinking of writing a sequel, cuz I'm not satisfied with this. Anyone willing to read?

This is supposed to be a Xiaolin Showdown fanfic. Haven't worked out the ending yet...
And the protaganist isn't Akuru now. She's someone much much crueler. She kinda reminds me of Sita, from The Last Vampire by Christopher Pike.
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BellaKasumi Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2007
Since you've been asking for critique, I'm going to give you a lot! Don't be put off by anything I say, it's all meant to be constructive, and I do love this piece ^_^

"While people are always afraid that there may be something lurking in the darkness, just waiting to scare them, I've always been confident that I can hide from that something." ---Something about the punctuation in this line makes it sound just slightly awkward; maybe a misplaced comma... also, you can make the scary sound scarier, I know you can :)

"In the day, I travel. I am a nomad, and have no place to call a home. At night... When the faming ball we call the sun disapears and the glowing silver disc we call the moon rises, my power is strenghtened, and U become something inhuman. " --- Slight mistakes, "faming" needs to be "flaming" (I believe) and that capital U is suposed to be an "I" if I'm not mistaken. Also using "...we call the sun" and "... we call the moon" in the same scentance... to me it sounds repetitive, I dunno maybe it's just me. I do compliment you on the imagery used here though. In general, you can give this paragraph a bit more descriptive punch.

Some people may call me a witch, maybe a monstor, or even a demon, I call myself a survivor. Face it. Life is cruel, and I survive in any way I can. Even if I have to kill. And I do enjoy killing. --- Wow, love it! slight spelling mistake: monstor is supposed to be monster. And also the last two lines "Even if I have to kill. And I do enjoy killing." You have the right idea, but the wording is awkward and doesn't make sense somehow...

So there's my nitpicky critique lol, hopefully it helps!! Can't wait to read more of this ^_^
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fukaimoriMidori Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2007
Thank you! :hug:
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BellaKasumi Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2007
You're welcome ^_^
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