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Zero was slumped in the corner of the bathroom, panting hard. He started when he saw he wasn't alone.
"Get...back..." he managed to choke out.
Then he rose. His eyes were glowing bright-red. Fangs slid into view as he grinned.
"Kurai," Akuru muttered. "Now would be a good time to raise a barrier....."
"Working on it," Kurai answered, clapping her hands together. A red barrier appeared just as he lunged towards them. Then he bounced off.
A golden ball of holy energy appeared between Akuru's palms, just powerful enough to knock him out.
"You can't hurt him!!!" Kurai screamed and hurled at her a weak fireball, causing Akuru to fall.
"Okay, maybe I should hurt you instead,"Akuru growled as she picked herself up. "Why can't I hurt him, anyway?!?"
"'Cos....'cos.... he's just TOO CUTE!!!"
Akuru fell on the ground again.
"Oh fine," she grunted. "You deal with him. And what about Inuyasha?"
"Inuyasha?Who's that?"
"Okay...." Akuru muttered. This was the worst crush Kurai had ever had.
Water suddenly spilled out of a nearby sink, flowing towards Zero. It covered him like a coccoon, then froze, imobilising him.
"Mine!" Kurai sang happily. She reached to lower the barrier. Then....
A woman with her hair in a ponytail and body wrapped in scarves and fur burst into the room.

"Zero!" she gasped.
Only then did Akuru and Kurai realise it was a man.
"Zero, snap out of it!" Yuki burst into the room.
Zero blinked. "Yuki?" His eyes fadded from red to its usual beautiful violet. At the same time, his fags slid back into his mouth.
Yuki tirned to Akuru and Kurai. "I'm so sorry....It completly slipped my mind to tell you he-"
"Is a vampire," Kurai finished, her head bowed."COOL!!!" She exclaimed, her eyes sparkling. She leapt for Zero and he oushed her away immediately. Yuki looked at Akuruu questioningly.
"She's forgotten what a vampire is," Akuru answered. "It happens every single time she 'falls in love'."
"Erm...What happened?" Zero asked, confused.
"Nothing, "Yuki assured him."You didn't take your bllod tablets again, did you?"
Zero's face immediately turned black."I refuse to take them."
"You became like..." Kurai held her body stiffly, and switched to serious battle mood. (Eyes glowing, fangs lengthening etc. Like how Inuyasha looks like when he's a full demon and how Sesshomaru looks like when he's really upset.)
"Uh huh, it was something like that," Akuru nodded.
"Zero, you're going to be a dangerto everyone at this rate," Yuki sighed,
He glared at her,took out several pills and popped them in his mouth. "Happy?" he growled.
The woman/man turned to Akuru and Kurai.
"Yuki was telling me about you just now. Your friends are alright, thay'll recover soon. I'm, Chairman Cross by the way."
"Zero!" Yuki exclaimed.
Zero was coughing up blood. Lot's of blood.
The third chapter.......It took so long since I wasn't allowed to use the computer loing enough to type this out.

EDIT

I have torn up the manuscript of this story in a fit of rage, and I have no intention of continuing it. Please support my first Xiaolin Showdown fanfic and read [link] ! Thanks.
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ShadowxScarlet109 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012
Is she shouting in concern or anoyance?
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MangaManiac16 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012  Student General Artist
Please please please please pleeeeaaaaasssse continue! This is great work!
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jd-vampire Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2009
WAAAAAAAAAAAAH, Y DID U STOP WRITING, I WAS RLLY ENJOYING THAT *crys* im so upset, thats rlly good,i bet the end would have been awsome!
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animegal8195 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2007  Student General Artist
when r u going to write the 4 becuase i was looking a story like this :):):):):):):):):):):):)

why cant we get along?
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fukaimoriMidori Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2007
Erm..... Please take a closer look at the Author's Comments. Thank you.
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cagna Featured By Owner May 13, 2008
why stop writing this story? What made you mad enough to tear up the manuscript? The story was getting good. Man and I was looking forward to the next chapter. Darn!!!
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fukaimoriMidori Featured By Owner May 18, 2008
Well... Being my first serious fanfiction, the characters were completely... ridiculous. Too perfect. I don't like getting flamed when I know it's bad.
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cagna Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2008
an author criticizing their own work, though natural, is not right. they are always too hard on themselves. get the readers' opinions or even a 3rd party that has an impartial view on the subject to decide if it is good or not. otherwise you might be depriving your readers of a piece of great literature. you should reconsider your decision to not write anymore for this story.
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fukaimoriMidori Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2008
Thanks.

I did finish it. Kinda. Sorta. Before burning the manuscript.

But you have to admit, all the characters are mary sues. This is one of my earliest fanfictions, so yeah.
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cagna Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2008
mary sues? either way i think it was a waste to have burned it.
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